Reflection on Project 2

In this blog post I will be analyzing the corrections I made on my final draft on project two and the revision process I went through to try to make the paper look flawless to the best of my ability.

1) What was specifically revised from one draft to another?

I made sure that I included all the aspects that were on the rubric in my essay. I needed to find a few more quotations for the speech to use as support for my argument points. I also needed to work on introducing my quotes so they didn't just come out of nowhere. I also needed to improve connecting more with my audience. I needed to similarities to connect more with the topic I am discussing. The original connections were not as similar to my topic as they should have been.

2) Point to global changes: how did you reconsider your thesis or organization?

I rewrote my thesis only slightly. Overall I thought it was good in getting the points that I was writing about to the reader. I did, however change how I opened into the thesis. The intro needed to be a bit more grabby and introduce the speech better. I gave more context about the speech which helps give the reader an idea of who President Obama's audience was.

3) What led you to these changes? A reconsideration of audience? A shift in purpose?

Talking to my professor helped a lot with the editing process. He was able to read the essay in a way that I will never be able to see it since I am the one that wrote it. I don't always notice the faults I make in my essay writing since I wrote it and in my opinion something may make more sense than if someone else tries to read it.

4) How do these changes affect your credibility as an author?

By adding more factual information or support for my claim, the opposition has less to fight back and are that much more likely to believe my claim. By being more organized in my ideas, the audience has a better idea of what I am saying and they are more likely to believe that I am more knowledgable about the topic.

5) How will these changes better address the audience or venue?

By allowing the connection between me and the audience flow better with the topic, it will make me seem less desperate to connect with them and they connect more with me without maybe being as aware that they are doing it.

6) Point to local changes: how did you reconsider sentence structure and style?

I didn't really focus as much on my sentence structure. But I did try to limit the number of complex sentences that I was using. The longer the sentences get, the more likely you are to lose your audience in the essay's complexity.

7) How will these changes assist your audience in understanding your purpose?

By understanding my words more, they will understand the point I am trying to get across and therefore, understand the entire purpose better. Also, by improving my conclusion, they will be left with a better sense of what is going on.

8) Did you have to reconsider the convention of the particular genre in which you are writing?

I originally thought we were writing our rhetorical analysis in the same form as the author we are analyzing. This means that I started out writing in more of speech form. This complicated the structure I was using and therefore was not what the teacher wanted. I ended up rewriting much of my essay, since I now know that it is an essay.

9) Finally, how does the process of reflection help you reconsider your identity as a writer?

I give my chance a see how others think of how I write and what ways I can improve that I originally wouldn't have thought of. Sometimes my mindset remain that why fix what isn't broken. But writing doesn't necessarily have to be broken to fix. There is not a right or wrong way to write so it can always be changed for the better.

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Reflection:

After reading through Swati and Mike's reflections it seemed that I did similar editing to what they did. Much of my time was focussed on making sure my introduction and conclusion included everything they needed to. The body paragraphs were easier for me to form since I knew what points I needed to make. I did have to work to find more evidence to include. It still makes me question whether I have too long of paragraphs, but I am never sure. These posts also made me realize that I can always work on improving my work and how editing is never really a completed process.