Paragraph Analysis 2

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This is a link of the paragraph analysis that I did of my first draft of the rhetorical analysis. In this blog I will be going over what I thought about my draft and what are things I can change about it.

In my draft I feel like I make my point in my introduction sentences but tend to lose my point as the paragraph goes on. This is something I can work on editing. I can also work on more effortlessly intertwining the actual stem cell research topic and the topic about the rhetorical strategies used by President Obama. My argument does not make as much sense if you don't know what the original stem cell research argument is about.

I can watch the organization of the actual paragraphs themselves, but I do a nice job connecting the idea of one paragraph to another. I just need to work on making conclusions in each paragraph that makes sure the point is being made.